From the beginning, one of the main threats in Born Not Made has been government “spooks.” In the book, most people don’t believe in magic, and people with magic live in secret from the government. If found, the government kidnaps them and studies them. At least, that was the original premise. Now, I’m second-guessing myself on that.
It started when I realized a flaw in that part of the worldbuilding. The main character, Trace, used to belong to a section of the military that is 100% made up of magical creatures or people with magic. And as I was plotting last time, it hit me that a government military group like that did not fit well with a government that kidnaps and studies all magical people.
What, do they let some of the magic people go if they serve in the military? How could they trust people they kidnapped to destroy what they want destroyed? Or protect what they want to protect?
And who keeps them from rebelling and taking over? What would keep all magic people from rebelling? Especially people who had been kidnapped and tortured? Or had family taken? At that point, people 1. fight back, 2. leave, or 3. hide if they don’t think they can manage 1 or 2 (generally some of each by different members of the group).
Are you hearing what I’m hearing? Yep. That’s the car of the plot running into a few huge, gaping holes. The kind that destroy tires or even swallow cars whole.
It’s solvable. I’m not sure what the exact solution will be, but I see several different potential paths that I could take.
And I’m not going to use the obvious bandaid. The whole “One arm of the government doesn’t know what the other arm is doing” trope or the “super secret part of the government that even the rest of the government doesn’t know about” version of it.
But I only have 2 months left (a little less – Aaaaaah!), so I better fix this and fix it fast. Wish me good luck!